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RedheaD by MissMisery94 RedheaD by MissMisery94
A fun revamp of a school project.
Made with: Windows Fresh Paint

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XetaJTS Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
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Alright let's get down to business. I am going to list off the things i like about the piece first then i will go into what i think you need to improve. Let's just get to the point the hair is flawless. This seemed to be where your main focus of the piece came into play. Using darker shades of red to your advantage and using light streaks through it as well gave it the allusion of 3-d and real hair. The design of the hair is spot on too, you seemed to already have had the design planned out so it worked into your favor. The white lines through it also help to just solidify this piece as great. The face structure you put in also matches the hair style so it is a win, win there.

Now to get to where i think your flaws stem from. Even though your main focus was the hair it seems as if you didn't give enough attention to the rest of her. You can't just finish half a test and say "oh they are all right so i should pass." NO! It does not matter if you got half of every test right, you still fail. Now i know that seems harsh but it is just an analogy, I am not trying to give you a hard time or anything, as i stated i like this piece but you need to put more attention into areas. First off the eyes, every one who i have talked to has told me that the eyes are one of the most important parts of a piece like this, remove the eyes, remove the soul. I would advice making the eyes more realistic or don't do the black lines that are in it. It may just be me but the neck seems to be off, but as i said it may just be me, just don't really fit the piece. Nose is fine, lips are okay noting special, and the eyebrows could be more detailed.

I hope that this helped in someway for a future piece because trust me you have talent! The hair proves you do, just be sure the detail you put into the hair you put into other things as well in the future okay! Pokemon Mystery Dungeon (PMD) - Lucario (happy) 
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MissMisery94 Featured By Owner Edited Mar 15, 2017  Student General Artist
Firstly, thank you so much for your honest feedback.

Secondly, I totally agree about your views, especially with regards to her features. I was orginally going to just trace over my project (lh3.googleusercontent.com/eS3C…), but it was too difficult for me, especially while first using Windows Fresh Paint. However, I shouldn't have given up, as you said. Perhaps I'll revamp this piece once more in the future once I learn more anatomy. 

I suppose the eye could've used more work, but it was just meant to be a simple eye makeup design since the focus was mainly the hair. Plus, I was getting used to using a graphic program, but I'm glad that I've made good progress so far. :D (Big Grin) 
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XetaJTS Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
You have! It is very good as i said! The only problem i had with the eyes was the black lines in the eye, the eye shape is fine but the black lines kind of take away from it. But still great work and can't wait to see more!Pokemon Mystery Dungeon (PMD) - Lucario (happy) 
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JasonGalterio Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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I like your use of colors, the blue really pops to make the eye the focus of the image. The contrast with the red color works really well.

There are a couple of items that I think you were a little heavy handed with; the freckles and the white lines in her hair in particular. The freckles seem a little much and end a bit abruptly. Instead of using black, maybe a lighter gray color? This would make them seem a little less abrupt? The white hair line seems unnecessary as well.

The anatomy seems a bit off as well, particularly with her chin. I would expect the edge of the chin to begin in line with her nose. It kind of makes her loose the symmetry of her face, which makes something seem off to the viewer.

The neck / upper chest is hard to define as well. It's hard to determine if those lines are the muscles of her neck or if they are actually one of her hands in front of her. I do like the skin tone change though, since it helps the face pop a bit and make that a focal point of the image.

The hair tone and flow is very well done as well, this looks like a strength of yours and not an easy skill to accomplish. Recognizable hair is always hard to accomplish well.
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MissMisery94 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2017  Student General Artist
Thank you so much for your comment!

I agree, I should've used a more subtle color for the freckles, I assumed I could've made them match her natural hair color (like eyebrows and eyelashes). At the time, I added the white hairline pretty last minute to add more depth and dimension to the hair, which I still gotta work on.

Yeah, anatomy and skeletal structure are the worst for profile portraits CURSE YOU! I originally was trying to trace my original project (lh3.googleusercontent.com/eS3C…). As you can see, I tried to redefine her hair and fix her neck and upper torso, which I see now still could've been better. I guess I should find some anatomy resources (and a better graphic program, Windows Fresh Paint does have its limits) 

I'm glad that you appreciate the hair and skin tone, they were definitely the most notable improvement of this piece :) (Smile) 
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